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Challenge: Desolation II (Advanced Editing IV)
Camera: Canon EOS-350D Rebel XT
Lens: Sigma 18-50mm f/2.8 EX DC for Canon
Location: Alleyway in Magnolia, Arkansas
Date: Jun 16, 2006
Aperture: 9
ISO: 400
Shutter: 1.6sec
Galleries: Urban, Emotive
Date Uploaded: Jun 18, 2006
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Ok, this is the immediate shot that came to mind when i saw this challenge. it was a challenge for me, for i usually do happy portraits, but i had a lot of fun w/ this. totally different style for me.
post processing:
*i used my 18-55 wide angle at 18mm on this one, so some of the lines were bent, so i ran it through PTlens set to my lens and it fixed it right up. cropped the dead pixels from that out, and they were straight.
**levels adjustment layer to darken entire photo. i flashed her with my speedlight at the last split second of the exposure to get more detail, so it was pretty bright.
***curves adjustment on the RGB master channel.
****dodged a lot of the creases in her jeans and some of the cracks for detail. also burned her eyebrows, the corners of the picture to bring the viewer\'s eye in to her, and cloned out a small twig that was coming up from the bricks in the background (her right).
*****Noise Ninja ran once, VERY slight unsharpen mask, and save for web.
have no clue how this will score. i just hope i keep above a 6, which is my goal from now on. hope you enjoy.
-Jed |
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07/02/2006 07:18:23 PM |
From the Critique Club:
First of all I would like to say that you have a very beautiful model and I would love to have the opportunity to shoot her. This shot begs for my what I like what I don't like treatment so here goes...
What I like: Compositionally, this shot is right on. You have your model in one third of the frame. This doesn't exactly follow the rule of thirds but is very close and works well. I love how you have your model posed and her expression. I love how it appears that your lighting surrounds or floods the area that the model is in, however...
What I don't like: This to me looks a tad bit overprocessed. Please remember that this is only my opinion and I'm a bit old school when it comes to post processing. The circle of light around your model almost looks to perfect as if it was created in the p/p. The fade off from lit to shadow is too dramatic. It doesn't look real. Your model also looks a little plastic. This is probably a result of the neat image. I don't know exactly why, it may be a combination of the lighting and the use of neat image, but her clothes don't look 'real'. There is a bit of fuzziness to them that makes it look surreal. For this critiquer, this doesn't work all that well. The last thing I would have to say I was drawn to in a negative way is her eyes. They look dull or dead. Even the slightest bit of catch light in her eyes would have added a lot of feeling to the shot.
Overall, it's a nice shot. With a little less in the post processing and a touch of catch light this could be a great shot.
Yours
TC |
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06/26/2006 11:32:49 AM |
Hmmm, you know, I don't see any obvious problems with the shot. One thing that gets me a bit (but isn't a huge deal) is either her pose or the shadows or something makes her upper body look very triangular. In other words, her head looks disproportionately small. Maybe it's the hood holding her hair down and we are used to seeing the extra space hair takes up. That isn't enough to get you down to a 5.4 though. One other thought is that she looks perhaps a bit too clean to be truly forlorn. Is life really that bad with your manicured toes in your flip flops and designer jeans made to look ragged?
I bet your biggest issue here was the emotional definition of desolation. Yes, I 100% agree it fits, but people are so literal on this site it probably lost some for that. Note the 29 4s. There is no way a photo of this quality gets a 4 other than people don't think it fits the challenge well.
I think the composition, focus and lighting are all well done. Just chalk this one up to the voters not "getting it" because they take an average of 3-5 seconds to vote each picture. |
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06/25/2006 08:29:42 PM |
well, didn't do near as good as i thought it would. oh well :) it's one of my favorite submissions ;) all that matters i suppose :)
great pics in this challenge, really enjoyed voting |
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06/25/2006 03:20:23 AM |
| The mood of the challenge is in this image..... |
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06/23/2006 06:06:17 PM |
| This photo has a nice feel. I love the color. |
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06/23/2006 04:27:06 PM |
| A very nice study with moving colors. 7 |
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06/23/2006 03:38:00 AM |
| Good idea but the processing seems a little odd. |
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06/22/2006 09:55:26 PM |
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06/20/2006 03:22:19 PM |
| Very nice portrait and very well done. Only suggestion...to me her face looks a bit plastic |
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06/19/2006 12:53:34 PM |
| Nice idea, and quite well executed, but it seems asthough it's been darkened in PP and that gives it slightly odd hue on the models face mostly. |
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06/19/2006 05:44:04 AM |
| A bit on the smooth side for my taste. |
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06/19/2006 12:39:54 AM |
| 'Abandoned Hope', with manicured toe nails? ;-) |
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06/18/2006 09:42:31 PM |
| Nice post editing. Love the lighting as well. 8 |
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