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01/29/2006 07:47:46 PM |
::: Critique Club ::: [The Saj]
First Impressions: This photo feels too much like a
snapshot. And has a few technical elements that just
keep it from being really moving.
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Composition: The composition does help to emphasize the
main subject. The main subject is almost centered and
might come across better if offset a little bit more.
Subject: The male subject's hand seems to be caught in
motion, it almost looks as if it is above her body. It
also is in a strange position. The background subjects
some across well.
Technical (Colour, focus, and light): Although the focus
is decent, the flash gives an unnatural feel to the color
of the main subjects and draws out highlights to a level
of becoming distracting elements. (The shine one the
forehead and hands.) The background signs could have
been a nice element if the clarity was better, however
the lack of clarity of a few of the signs makes for
distracting elements.
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Summary: This photo comes across too strongly as a
"snapshot", that's not to say that it is not a nice
capture of a fond memory.
To improve?: Try to eliminate some of the background
distraction. Perhaps an angle in which there are more
couples in the background and then setting the one couple
central and closer to the camera. And more natural light
or perhaps a light diffuser.
I do note that you're using a P&S so the use of an
external flash and light diffuser is not an option. But
I did read your profile that you just upgraded to a Canon
Digital Rebel. Consider an external flash and something akin to Fong's Lightsphere or other similar light diffuser.
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It is my hope that these insights are helpful, and
constructive. If you have any questions regarding this
critique, please feel free to PM me.
- Jason "The Saj" |
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01/22/2006 04:38:50 PM |
| Cool imagery with wonderful expression both facial and general body language. |
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01/21/2006 02:29:36 PM |
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01/20/2006 09:57:25 AM |
| Youve certainly caught the feeling, maybe a little more concentration on focus and light next time. |
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01/19/2006 06:06:24 PM |
That hand is kinda low, but at the same time not low enough. Make up your mind, either 5 inches up or 5 inches down!
Oh, yes, singled-out... meets the challenge, it is not DOF as much as lighting that accentuates the couple, but that is perfectly acceptable. My personal take on the challenge description is that it offers a guideline, not hard and fast rule. That said, while it meets the challenge, it does not have that wow factor that differentiates this photo from an average snapshot. Hence the average score, 6. |
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01/19/2006 05:39:47 PM |
| this is cool. i feel like i've been there all night partying. i like how you timed it so that the bud light sign was directly over her head. bartender...i'd like another shot of tequila. |
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01/18/2006 10:02:29 PM |
| I don't seem much DOF isolation here, and the shot is not interesting both composition- and story-wise. |
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01/16/2006 06:40:32 PM |
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01/15/2006 08:47:37 PM |
| The challenge asked for a person to be singled out in a crowd using shallow depth of field. |
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