Greetings from the Critique Club :)
My first impression: Boring subject, interesting lighting.
The angle of view is well chosen for these little guys. It does also sustain your idea of a conversation you have run into by surprise. The low key lighting is elegant and gives shape and depth to your subject, definitively the strong part of this picture. The focus is perfect, there is nothing to object technically.
The composition from a point of view of design is not so strong. There is a framing of the subject by the window frame and the base, but the effect is completely lost by the open space in the bottom left corner, which draws the eye out of the picture. I think that cropping the left part and leaving a "filmstrip" framing would be more effective. There is a good contrast between the dark foreground and the light background. High contrast is usually a good thing, but here it does draw the attention to the smudged part of the tiles on the right, weakening the great pattern of the bricks.
I love the little stories that come with your pictures. In a blog for instance this photo would be acclaimed by most viewers. In such a context you would deserve by far a higher score. But on DPC it's the first impression which produces the score, you can already forget the title. Trivial subjects (cannot be bothered to get out of her flat type) can do well, but they usually get battered for the slightest flaws, which would not even be considered with another subject...
Anyway, keep on the good work and occasionally you will produce a very successful mainstream picture by mistake ;-)
If you have a question or a remark about this critique, feel free to contact me.
Mike
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