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07/27/2004 05:37:02 PM |
From the critique club:
This is a descriptive piece of work with a cryptic message. Like the Poet, you also have poetic license in making this representation. And like the poet you also risk the chance of being mis-understood. The concept of the showing the feet and the chalk on the sidewalk is nice. You may have explored the possibility of selecting a better piece of real estate without the stain. It would have certainly kept the eyes from going over to examine it.
Yet, your idea invites interest. The sun showing through the leaves is a very pleasing effect. The picture is not at all in question and the problem is that the title and the written chalk message create an immediate riddle. Is the complete phrase "Love is a place with brightness and peace?" If so, we have a phrase that is out of context, with little meaning to the viewer. If the entire poem was read, I am sure we will see the reason for the phrase.
Again, I like the composition, but you have managed to shoot one right over out heads. If I were to rate this picture I would give the composition a solid 6 and its title a 4.
Since you have a very good bent to create an interesring picture, I would suggest you return to a similar idea with a more universal message. It may do better than you think. dan |
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07/20/2004 03:52:56 PM |
| I feel like you must be trying to say something here I just don't understand what it is. As an expressive piece I can see how it may have deep value for you but I just don't seem to be getting it here. The title "With Brightness of Peace" doesn't seem to have any connection in my mind to the phrase written in the photograph "love is a place". I can see how the feet might have some tie-in as they are how we are most often connected to places we travel but I think I must be failing to see the big picture. I hope you'll elaborate on this after the challenge either in your notes about the shot or with a PM. |
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07/20/2004 01:16:18 PM |
| That's creative, and it's interesting that it seems you've chosen b&w to make the phrase stick out more than anything in color that would've caught your eye. |
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07/19/2004 12:28:37 PM |
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07/15/2004 08:02:14 AM |
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07/14/2004 06:19:11 PM |
| The black thing disturbs a little bit... |
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07/14/2004 07:18:27 AM |
| Very nice message, I don't get the bare feet though.. I think it would have been fine without them. Still.. (10) |
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