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01/02/2010 12:01:19 PM |
Here's your Critique and Feedback, as requested! :D
This is by far one of the strangest photos on DPC this week. Based on the original image you posted in the description, this is only a small portion of the image of a cigarette you took with your camera. Overall, it's a fantastically composed shot, but since you cropped in so tightly from the original shot, you get quite a bit of motion blurring on the embers of the cigarette.The original shot appears to be all in focus, but as you look deeper, the only hing that's truly in focus is the spark. The more of the full-focus spark you can show, the more my interest grows on this photo. This can be fixed by using a stronger macro lens or a reverse-lens technique so you don't have to crop-in so much, exposing the blurry elements of the cigarette embers. Also, there are many different ways you couldn't cropped this. And I personally feel showing a bit of black above the top of the cigarette and off to the right a bit would've raised your score, and still not have exactly exposed your "Puzzle." I like the blurry sparks in the background as well, and I'd like to see a crop where you showed the entire spark as well as the cigarette ember, but without showing anything more on the bottom-left of the cigarette itself. There is a lot of interest in what you've copped out and I'd really like to see some of the in the photo. You should aim to show as much of the photo as possible without exposing its true form. I think you would've gotten a much higher score had you used a stronger macro lens and not cropped out the entire spark. overall, the effect comes off as almost lighting. I like it and I think I gave it a 5 or a 6 in voting. This definitely deserved a higher score then it got. Hope I helped!
-  ColemanGariety
- The Critique Club |
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12/27/2009 03:00:12 PM |
| Looks like a sparkler over some burning paper. I like the streaks going to the right. |
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12/27/2009 05:31:15 AM |
Sparks from a fire, although the sparks look pyrotechnic... The fire also looks a bit "flaky" like paper ash or something.
Update: Ha! I bought my GF a magnesium fire starter for Christmas. Funny thing.. Photographs of the sparks look EXACTLY the same;)
Now I'm guessing magnesium fire starter over a fire.. |
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12/26/2009 08:19:59 PM |
| perhaps something that sparks put into a fire? |
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12/26/2009 07:07:56 PM |
| Sparklers on a burning fireplace? Lovely abstract. |
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12/24/2009 11:26:27 AM |
| fire/ash with some twig or something burning... |
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12/22/2009 10:43:48 PM |
| Sparkler in the fireplace or a fire pit? |
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12/22/2009 02:18:05 PM |
| Sparkler over some coals. |
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12/22/2009 08:09:09 AM |
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12/22/2009 08:08:34 AM |
| no freaking clue but i love it 7 |
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12/22/2009 06:40:34 AM |
Looks like you added some snow and pyro technique to your fire.
Interestingly good image! |
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12/22/2009 06:30:38 AM |
| Looks like the ashes of paper over some glowing embers, possibly of the same, but what are the white streaks? Pieeow pieeow... sparkler? |
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12/21/2009 08:48:44 PM |
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12/21/2009 07:23:18 PM |
| Sparkler on burning/burnt paper. |
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12/21/2009 05:39:24 PM |
| weld slag, grinding etc... |
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12/21/2009 03:47:19 PM |
| Looks like that was dangerous. cool effect. Looks like some galaxy from star trek |
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12/21/2009 10:21:42 AM |
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12/21/2009 07:32:42 AM |
| Looks intergalactic. Or like a sparkler? |
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12/21/2009 04:55:10 AM |
| A sparkler in a fire? The background looks like hot coals. |
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12/20/2009 10:42:03 PM |
| Cool image, and you got me stumped |
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12/20/2009 07:14:13 PM |
| Looks like burned paper, but you wouldn't use an obvious title, would you? |
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