Critique Club Critique
First Impressions
Interesting image, title makes me wonder if it was intentional or a typo. Yellow bag detracts because of the color/exposure control.
Photograph Information, Technicals & Composition Review
I like the dof on the man but wonder whether a little deeper would have allowed the bag to not have issues, if indeed you wanted to keep that element.
Composition wise, the angle makes this seem slightly awkward, especially with the crop. More space on the left, even if empty space, would have given the man more room, including his glance - if that makes sense. At first I wondered about a much tighter crop, especially for this Challenge, to allow his face to dominate the frame more. However on inspecting the image closer, there are other interesting elements, such as his clothing and that 'blown' yellow bag - which tells a small story. Looks like matches and cigarettes in the bag. Still, for the Challenge, if the quality was there, I think a much bolder crop would have allowed for more of a study of this young man.
Comments, Score & Placement Review
125/159 and a score of 5.02 gets you over the '5 line', but still a fair way down the bottom of the pack. I think 720 would have helped you create more impact for the voters who may have stopped and studied the image a little longer. My guess is that they were also distracted by the bag.
Your one comment received at least tells you what they saw and their interpretation of the capture/portrait. Yes, it is more of a candid than a portrait - although in my opinion, you can have one in the same, however to be a stronger contender for the image, the candid must be foremost a study of the person, or portrait - rather than looking like a candid foremost and a portrait by default - hopefully you understand what I'm trying to say there.
Summary
A variation in composition to get the face better placed in the frame to dominate - you may still be left with the issues in the bag which may not be recoverable from, cropping might not be an option. Perhaps a conversion to tones or b&w may have created something good, would be a matter of experimenting. Otherwise, an interesting portrait, that I wish I could have seen the face more dominant in a larger frame (720). |
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