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07/30/2008 11:39:04 AM |
Critique Club Critique
by karmat
Overall, I like this. It has a very modern feeling to it.
Compositionally, I think it would be more effective to crop it so that the eye wasn't showing. Having the single eye is a bit disconcerting and throws the shot off-balance a bit. Also, a tighter crop would help to emphasize the sugar on the lips more, whereas now it could be anything (but is assumed to be sugar because of the challenge).
Technically, you have achieved the high key look well. However, there is a fine line in HK photography that when crossed, you lose important details. I think that is what happened on the lips. If the sugar had been really sharp focused and clearly sugar, I think the shot would have been more effective for the challenge. As it is, though, there is a lot of detail loss on the lips and it almost looks like she just needs a good exfoliation. :)
Again, personally, I really like the shot. I think for this challenge, though, a stronger focus, and clearer focus, on the sugar would have made it stronger.
best to you in future challenges.
Karma |
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07/28/2008 06:58:51 AM |
I thought you did a really nice job. The high key is great and I love that you are just peeking out of a corner. |
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07/26/2008 03:19:25 PM |
I like it, the missing eye is frustrating my senses. |
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07/26/2008 10:40:06 AM |
I get where you were going with this, but it looks a little too blown out. |
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07/23/2008 08:00:33 PM |
You have attempted a nice concept. There are few things I would want to mention, if you do not mind.
If the title is not there, I would not have been able to say that it is sugar on her lips. I mean, there is a loss of detail on the "sugar on lips". Also, the composition does not seem pleasing to me. The pose could have been a bit more pleasing. The eye seems to be like she is staring with fear. |
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07/22/2008 11:19:45 AM |
EXCELLENT idea, perfctly executed. I have a feeling this will do very well, and it's certainly one of my favorites thus far! |
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07/21/2008 10:38:55 AM |
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07/20/2008 08:02:56 PM |
Too overexposed for my tastes. Interesting idea though.
evan |
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