Greetings from the Critique Club.
Hi Angela,
I have really admired some of your work in the past so it is great to get draw you for a critique. Sadly this one doesn\'t grab me like some of your other shots. That said I have found it extremely difficult to put my finger on what doesn\'t work. The following critique is my best shot at what has been a difficult job (pushing the boundaries of my own understanding).
I\'m a little confused by the technical details. An Aperture of 1/60 seems odd to me. Have you entered aperture and shutter-speed in the wrong boxes?
Taking my lead from the other commentators - theis shot is very dark. Nothing wrong with a dark shot and good use of negative space, but it does put a huge responsibility on having some aspect of the shot to really draw the viewer in. I think this is what is lacking here. as my eye flicks from lens to lens my mind is thinking, \'So?\'.
The lighting is what lets you down most - to me it looks linear, direct from the camera. It does nothing to add depth or subtelty to your shot. I\'m no professional on the subject (by any means), but I think you would have wanted a stronger, difused light-source at a lower angle. Although as I say, what do I know.
I think the POV does nothing for this shot. As it stands the angle of the lenses draws my eye off the image. Two lines are created, one along the bottom of the lenses and one along the top, which together expand from the bottom right out to the top left; in fact out of the top left. I would have much preferred a lower point of view and moved round to the right more, perhaps with the lens order reversed. I think this would have brought the eye in and the change in perspective would have emphasised the lenses as a subject more.
I hope this has been useful.
Cheers
Paul
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