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06/07/2006 03:04:48 PM |
*Greetings from the Critique Club*
The first thing I like about this image is the quality of line. There is no question what the subject is or where the eye should look first--the leading lines of the floor tiles carry the attention directly to the pill bottles and the face of the young woman. The lighting reinforces this concept--the choice of vignetted edges successfully pulls the eye back into the point of interest.
You have nicely isolated your subject by limiting the colors to earthy tones. The girl is paler than most of her surroundings carrying the apparent suicidal imagery further...the room and cat definitely feel more alive by your color and tone choices.
The lighting provides a very 3-dimensional feel in addition to the perspective lines. It does, however, appear to flatten out at the cabinetry and black void...leaving the cat nowhere to go.
The cat: Some of your commentors, as you predicted, did not like the cat (or its butt) included in the image. I think without the cat this image would be rather cliche and lifeless (no pun intended). For me, the cat passing through the image enhances the concept of the unconscious girl by contrast—they are opposites in many ways: she still, prone, intending to escape—the cat moving, upright, casually attending its business.
The girl: She has something of a posed quality about her...her left arm holding/pushing on the floor is the most telltale sign of "acting"--not awful though. It is hard to fool the mind into believing this type of concept since we are all such attentive observers of humansâ€Â¦this is well on its way. (details, details)
The pills and bottle: Perhaps a little over the top. The number of bottles helps to make clear the point of the image...two or three might not convey the message to the viewer so quickly. However, the more time I spend with the image the less I like the beer bottle...it breaks the shape of the young woman's head and simply seems out of place. This part of the staging might be a good point to re-think....are there too many pill bottles?...could there be fewer and still convey the message?...should the beer bottle be tipped over as well?..should the woman's face be visible or obscured by the source of her angst?....etc.
The topic and title: You clearly fit the challenge by using a Beatle's lyric...I agree with one or more of your commenters that you've re-interpreted what most consider an upbeat and hopeful song---but I (personally) think that it is a valid interpretation of the simple lyrics. Some found this image depressing...I think that's great! (It is what you were going for, isn't it?)
Overall, you have a fine image that made an emotional splash among your commenters. You scored well in the challenge...not bad for your first entry at DPC! There are no real technical issues with this image--you've controlled depth of field, focus, lighting, post-processing, etc.
Congratulations and good luck!
--Kadi |
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06/06/2006 12:21:36 PM |
| very depressing, but aswesome work! |
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06/06/2006 08:38:25 AM |
| Too many props but nice effect around the edges |
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06/06/2006 04:28:51 AM |
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06/06/2006 02:10:20 AM |
| I love the irony, the cat creates a sense of isolation and the floor tiles drag you right in.The frigidness of the model actually captures more of a sense of suffering rather than death, which adds a little hope. |
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06/04/2006 07:28:09 PM |
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06/03/2006 01:13:12 PM |
| Is this sarcastic, or is passed out drunk freedom? |
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06/02/2006 08:37:56 AM |
| dark. the extremely low viewpoint works really well as does the lighting and darkness around the edges. |
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06/02/2006 04:54:03 AM |
| Good interpretation and composition. |
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06/02/2006 01:02:43 AM |
| very touching photo. The camera angle and dark edges makes it. |
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06/01/2006 09:26:48 PM |
| Cool lighting and excellent use of leading lines via the tile, but the cat is distracting. |
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06/01/2006 09:01:35 PM |
Using a new formula....
0-2 Meets the Challenge = 2
0-2 Technical Merit = 2
0-4 Interest/Creativity = 2
0-2 The "wow factor" = 0
Final score: 6 |
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06/01/2006 06:33:39 PM |
| That´s not the sense this music makes to me, but its a good image... |
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06/01/2006 04:09:01 PM |
| I knew that cat wanted to kill you. Nice shot. |
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06/01/2006 02:43:12 PM |
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06/01/2006 01:08:19 PM |
| Good shot. I think it would be even more powerful if the cat wasn't in it. |
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06/01/2006 01:01:57 PM |
| this would be so much better if there weren't a cat but looking right at me... really. |
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06/01/2006 05:52:11 AM |
| Little shallower DOF that blurred the tile lines in the foreground might have given this a bit more of a dreamy feel, IMHO |
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06/01/2006 04:59:50 AM |
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05/31/2006 05:30:27 PM |
| I guess freedom has no escape from the dual plurarity of positive and negative. In this case the negative is pronounced. It is a rather dark and sad conclusion, but certainly one can not argue that this vessel is no longer responding to whatever the torment was. A thoughtful image. Bump. |
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05/31/2006 02:36:38 PM |
Not sure I like the vignetting but other wise a very emotional shot!
TC |
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05/31/2006 02:12:15 PM |
| I think you've overdone it on the pills, so to speak. It robs this image of any sense of realism, for which it would seem to depend for its impact; so it becomes just a cod pose, and possibly slightly dismissive of the idea of despair, by implication. |
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05/31/2006 11:02:29 AM |
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05/31/2006 01:58:11 AM |
| Pretty depressing, but well captured. |
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05/31/2006 12:57:08 AM |
Blackbird singing in the dead of night
Take these broken wings and learn to fly
All your life
You were only waiting for this moment to arise.
Gets my top shelf vote....10 |
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05/30/2006 08:36:06 PM |
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05/30/2006 08:36:04 PM |
| I love the cat. Just spotted it. Interesting take. Fits the song!! |
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