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Initial Thoughts
A nice attempt, but lacks some true perspective that could have been very easily fixed.
Composition / Content
Your composition suffers here from one minor thing that becomes a major element, it is almost completely *lacking* perspective. You have taken this shot almost straight on and it doesn't give the viewer anywhere to really go. The viewer is stuck in the middle section of the keys, which don't, tnemselves, really lead anywhere except the top and bottom of the frame. The shallow DOF seems to be just gratuitious instead of an integral part of the photo. However, not all is lost. You were on the right track.. it's just that the composition you chose lacks a dynamic that is, literally, just around the corner. Had you shifted the send the keys more into a vanishing point, toward a distance, you would have suddenly had a much more dynamic photo. Studying your subject and finding new and interesting ways to shoot them can really jump a photo from ok to good, and from good to great.
Background
I like the silverish look of the keyboard cabinet, but it's really not a "background" per se, and really does nothing for this particular shot in this particular perspective, IMO.
Camera Work / Technical
You've done some nice work with the technicals. Good exposure, nice focus where there is focus. I feel that the shallow DOF doesn't add anything though and really just locks the viewer into the center of the photograph, where there really isn't much to look at.
Digital Processing
Good work with the white balance, it looks pretty natural.
Fits the Challenge
There's perspective, but it's a really flat, uninteresting perspective. As I said, a little more work getting around the subject and finding a really nice, dynamic angle, would have improved this shot ten-fold, in my mind.
My Opinion of the Photo
A nice attempt, but just too plain. There are thousands of shots of keyboard/piano keys out there, and to really stand out, you have to *make* them stand out. This is more like a documentation photo, and as such, just fails to meet most DPC voter standards. |
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