Challenge:Dairy II (Advanced Editing VII) Location: My living room Date: Feb 10, 2013 Aperture: F/3,5 ISO: 125 Shutter: 1/50 Date Uploaded: Feb 10, 2013
I knew submitting this pic was risky...nevertheless, gave it a try. Shot th image immediately after a big draft of buttermilk, no teeth cleaning afterwards...Would like to have some comments concerning cropping and vignette utilization.
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My initial thoughts on this are that I am often off-put by these type of shots, but seperating myself from that, I think you did a good job composing this and filling the frame. I think what hurt this shot, accounting for the score, was the nose being out of focus. For a shot like this, you really want all parts of the image to be tack sharp.
Also, the black and white tones could use some more contrast as they look a little flat. Also as was mentioned, the stubble does not help in this case.
I noticed you wanted comments on the vignetting and to be honest I don't see any. If you added any, it's very subtle. I don't think this is the type of shot that would benefit from a vignette. If you take a look at stock photography for this type of shot you wouldn't see that, you made a good choice where that is concerned.
Don't be too discouraged by the placing and the score, we've all had them. This is how we grow as artists, keep shooting!
Keep in mind this is a critique of the picture, not of the photographer. Crop - I think you've chosen well for the crop - enough space left, right, top, and bottom - nose gives additional context, even though it is cut off. Vignetting - not enough to be a visually significant factor.
I think three things that really hurt your score are:
No white whites - yeah, I know buttermilk isn't white, but since it is in b & w, you could make it look white. As it is, the "whitest" part of the pictures looks like a very unattractive (even repulsive - especially on teeth) grey.
Lighting - I am no expert on lighting, but the picture's lighting makes this look like a dentist shot, with wet, icky teeth - pulling attention away from the milk-stache.
Stubble - little sprouts of facial hair are not attractive - either clean shaven, or a nicely trimmed mustache would work better.