HI Robert, welcome to the Critique Zone!
Great concept / idea, and I disagree with the comment below, it's a pretty good execution.I'm guessing that your score has more to do with voters not getting the link to the challenge than any major problems. What would I do differently, having seen this?
Technically, its a little soft which for such a technical and structured image does not help. You had a tough choice of lenses for this. Did you try the 50mm? I think that the added sharpness and the ability to reduce the DOF would be interesting to try. I don't know how you did the lighting on this, but a little more on the right would also have worked for me.
Artistically, you have really used the rule of thirds to your advantage here - it's great. The perspective, crop and DOF are all spot on. The noise on the right is a little distracting - is this a very tight crop?
Overall, I think that you may have reached the limit of your lens here rather than the limit of your talent and imagination. Time for a new toy?! A true macro lens would probably have let you really nail this. Maybe borrow one? I would like to see that!
Happy hunting,
Frank. |
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