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by jwaddison

Comment by snaffles:
Greetings from the Critique Club!

Initial Impression: A fun, playful, clean shot and yes I also tried to brush the crayon 'crumbs' off my screen! And cool double-colour crayon, where were those when I was growing up?!

Technical: I like the comp and leading lines here. Light is quite good but risks being flat, and that teeny little shadow gives the shot some dof. Focus is a little soft. I have that lens in MF, and it really makes you work for a sharply-focused macro.

Artistic: No problems with the concept here, and the execution is very good, but macros (and the dpc crowd) demand tack-sharp focus. I see you're also where I am at in terms of lights; you could use a secondary light to knock out that shadow if you wanted to.

FWIW: In a word, or name... IreneM. Even better, try to replicate one of her shots! After resizing your pics, try a couple of passes with unsharp mask and see if you like the result.

Overall a very pleasing pic to look at, I think you're going in the right direction. Good work!

Feel free to PM me with any questions.

Susan

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Comment by LadyK:
a two sided crayon? how cool! i must have missed those when i was little. nice smiley, nice and bright

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Comment by cebuloulou:
good lighting.

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Comment by desertsnail:
very cute idea- I liked it- seems lit it might have needed a bit more contrast in the shot- good luck

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Comment by Steef:
i just tried to brush the shavings off of my monitor... this is simple and cute. i like it.

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Comment by Sheryll:
Nice job. This is one that works really well with shallow dof. Some of them don't but this one does.

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Comment by Ja-9:
not the grandest in the challenge but not the worst by a long shot

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Comment by drewhosick:
haha. I love the work you did to put those two colors together. It's very simple, color's not great but it's an interesting shot nonetheless. I give it higher marks because of the wow factor you can't explain about an image.

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Comment by jdixonsd:
Nice shot, the lighting IMO is a little bright, I don't know if the shadow of the crayon would have helped it or not. JMO!

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Comment by Teafran:
The image meets the subject matter. A sound demonstration of the creative process in meeting the challenge in a very unusual way. A couple of minor detail problems as the image appears to be less than sharp. The DOF could have been used more effectively. The overly blank background isn't a good choice. A good solid entry into the challenge.