Right Down the Lineby
hammersamComment by ambaker: Critique Club Review:
Color Saturation and Hue: Lots of color! Nothing is over saturated, but there is a green artifact along the edges of the leading line where it is in soft focus, that are a bit odd.
Brightness and contrast: Image could be bit brighter. Contrast is good.
Focus and depth of field: Focus looks a little soft. Depth of field could be improved with smaller aperature.
With the soft edges on the leading line, the spots in the rug start to compete a bit. Most distracting are the line of bright dots along the horizon, leading the eye to the edges of the image.
I do not know how much control you had over the lighting in the black light room. However the top down lighting, results in the bowling pins looking a little flat. The ball has a nice shadow to tell the eye it is round. The pins need a little something also.
I do however, really like the uplight effect from the stripe on the lead pin. That is a very nice touch.
I think what hurt you most was the softness of the image. The rest works really well, and I'd love to see this one redone. This picture has very strong bones and you definetly have an eye for creative use of color. Keep at it, you'll make the top of the class before too long.
