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KimInNBComment by dsidwell: Greetings from the Critique Club!
I left some comments below already, and I certainly concur with all of the positive comments on this photo! This image carries with it a mild mystique that invites me to not only study it, but to take my thoughts beyond perhaps to other things such as nostalgia, history, and the pleasures of good workmanship. It is more than a scientific study; it is an invitation to join with you in admiring this instrument and symbolically others like it.
Your lighting goes far in helping this concept. It is not the lighting of science, but instead the angles from the upper left provide depth and nice, rich, dark shadows. Your point of view is helpful here, too, since by showing us the shadows, you are showing us a more complete instrument that has depth and "life." Which is why your natural inclination to provide that negative space on the bottom works so well and is so appropriate to this image: this negative space allows us to think that there is more here than meets the eye. It both balances the image visually and also hints to us that there is more out there.
You've captured some interesting textures here, too, and these add to the feeling of soft complexity (with its accompanying awe) the image creates.
Some below have mentioned the overexposed line through the word Sheaffer, and while this light does go far in adding depth and in bringing focus to the word--elements I see as crucial to your photo--It may be that making it just a bit softer wouldn't be as distracting. The pen itself could use some focus on the right, too; I can't see the purpose in softening the focus there when all else is so sharp. In other words, by itself, it does not establish a pattern to which the rest of the image conforms.
In sum: this is a marvelous image of which you should be proud. It accomlishes what it sets out to accomplish with flying colors (well, black and white anyway!). Only a few very minor things distract me, and they don't distract me enough to not think that this photo is superb. I gave you a 9 during the challenge, and I stand by it! Perhaps someday I'll be able to come up with a photo this intricate and refined. It is something I aspire to.
Keep up the good work! I hope to see more of your work in the future.
-David
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