"I'm Sorry... It won't happen again" (Propaganda of an abusive spouse.)
by FactoryX

Comment by sainaz:
this is sad, really sad, and you are showing it in your picture. a true painfull feeling!

"I'm Sorry... It won't happen again" (Propaganda of an abusive spouse.)
by FactoryX

Comment by Allyrellia:
I thought your picture and message were good, though I wish you hadn't included the parenthetical addition - leave some to us, I think we could have figured it out! I think that the only way the photograph might have been better was to use either a black or white background... that pink takes away from the seriousness of the shot, since it's a black and white (hard, clear) issue. I also wish her face was a bit more in focuse. Maybe making the picture black and white would be nice too.

Overall, you did a nice job, and I liked your entry.

"I'm Sorry... It won't happen again" (Propaganda of an abusive spouse.)
by FactoryX

Comment by amazoneea:
Not bad, but you could have used this as an anti abusive propaganda too with a different name. Focus a bit soft and lights need improvement IMHO but I understand that you wanted to hide the make up. 8

"I'm Sorry... It won't happen again" (Propaganda of an abusive spouse.)
by FactoryX

Comment by Neil:
Wow. Believeable and powerful. Some technical notes: I would guess you were going for dark tones, but I think a bit more contrast would have helped. Also, I think the light falloff towards the left is a bit too delineated and sudden. If it were mine, I am not sure whether I would have cropped it or tried for a more gradual drop off. Overall: Superb!

Wet Shave
by FactoryX

Comment by Neuferland:
Hi! I'm here from the Critique Club. This is a great shot and I love the cup! I do remember Burma-Shave signs on the highway from when I was just a baby mind you, LOL!

I like the set up of the shot, the razor, the towel, the cup and brush to spread the cream which is just coming over the side. An excellent set up overall.

Now for what doesn't sit quite right with me, the lighting, seems a bit dull and the back drop is cloth. In a situation like this I would expect ceramic or tile and I know that can be very difficult to come by in some situations but perhaps some white board or white poster board would offer a better reflection for the light and really make the picture pop with color and life. The shadows on the right are also a bit of a distraction to me, if they were behind the cup or offset by another light on the right so they weren't so dark. Also, the sheet looks like it's been ironed which is good but maybe also if it was pulled tighter so you didn't have any creases or folds in it?

The focus is good through out most of the shot, the backdrop is a bit blurred as it should be in a shot like this but so is the cup handle. It seems just a bit off from the rest of the shot.

The cropping is also well done except for the towel on the left, if the whole towel had been in the shot or cropped slightly tighter on the right to balance it out better. And a reddish/orange towel to match the cup would really make this shot pop.

Overall this is a very good shot, just a few tweeks and you would have a great shot. I liked this one during the challenge and like it even more coming back to take another look.

Good Luck In Future Challenges!

Deannda
DNeufer@stny.rr.com if you have any questions or want to discuss this further!

Message edited by author 2003-11-17 22:55:10.

Wet Shave
by FactoryX

Comment by SoulHunter74:
nice idea, but misses impact?

Wet Shave
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Comment by Glen King:
Not bad, but I think it might work better on the edge of the bathroom sink with the mirror in the background.

Wet Shave
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Comment by KarenB:
interesting idea.. lighting a bit bright.. would like to see early morning quality light here. whipped cream or thicker shaving cream would really add to this too.

Wet Shave
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Comment by istion:
cast the background out of focus. this space is way to distracting in focus.

Lonely pea
by FactoryX

Comment by bendb:
Great subject :-)