the first part of the day
by oferashel

Comment by Blackdog:
Took me a few minutes to work out what this was a shot of, not that there's anthing wrong with that. I suppose it was difficult to know where to crop this shot, what to leave in and what to miss out? Interesting because of its unusual viewpoint. Nice tones. Having said that I think it needs a more dramatic light source to lift it higher in the voting. I know that was probably out of your control.

the first part of the day
by oferashel

Comment by kiwinick:
I think the repeating patterns really work here and make an interesting image.

eggs
by oferashel

Comment by Falc:


Hi, I've been allocated this image from the list of images on the CC list requiring an in depth crit. I'll do my best.

In my voting I actually gave you a 7 for this image, I forgave the 'imperfections' which other commenters have already mentioned, but I think many of the voters will have marked you down severly for this lack of attention to detail. A few minuted cleaning and setup would have payed dividends.

I will try to examine whether there are other aspects of the image which resulted in such an unjustified low final score.
In order to do that I'm going to compare it to the other 'three egg' shot in the challenge, which might shed some llight on what people voted for.

The two images are in effect almost identical in concept, however yours is composed with a very rigid vertical rythm, thats usually a very pleasing tool. But what can sometimes work is a break in the rythm and that appears to be the case here.

The lighting of your image is from the front and laft of the eggs, this makes the eggs blend into the white background, losing a little definition. If you look closely at the other entry you will see that the eggs are lit from slightly behind. This makes the eggs just stand out a little more and defines the left hand edge of the eggs.

I hope you don't mind me using someone elses image as the vehicle for this critique, but I do think its sometimes useful to understand the differences, especially when the images are so similar and marked so differently.

Hope that helps a little.

Regards

Falc

eggs
by oferashel

Comment by awpollard:
Composition is alright, I think the light could be a little more dramatic. When viewing eggs artistically I like to see clean soft surfaces, I think these guys could have been cleaned up a little better prior to shooting. Maybe a softer light would mask some of the artifacts and imperfections a little better or even a dusting of baby powder or talc to whiten them up a tad.